Add tension to a scene that drags

Diagnose why this scene drags.

For the scene:
1. What does each character want in this scene specifically, not in the story overall? *If a character wants nothing, that is the problem.*
2. What stands in the way?
3. What changes by the end? A scene where nothing changes can usually be cut.
4. Where does the scene lose pressure — mark the paragraph.
5. What is said that could instead be withheld? Tension usually lives in what is not said.

Then propose fixes in order of how little they disturb the draft:
- Give an existing character a want
- Change what is at stake in the next few lines
- Enter later or leave earlier
- Cut the scene and move its information elsewhere

Rules:
- Work within my established characters and situation. *Do not invent a new character or event to fix it.*
- Do not rewrite the prose. Diagnose and propose.
- If the scene works and only feels slow because it follows a fast one, say that — pacing is a sequence problem as often as a scene problem.